Stormheller/Stormy/DuetPress ([info]stormheller) wrote,
@ 2007-11-14 19:50:00
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Entry tags:mywriting, spn

New Supernatural Story: To Live and Die in Las Vegas by Stormy Stormheller
Fandom: Supernatural
Pairing: Sam/Dean (also Sam/Dean/Crossroads Demon)
Rating: R-ish
Warning: There’s Wincest, and het sex that is actually demon sex and also threesome sex. Something for the whole family. None of it particularly graphic. Oh, and not a death story.
Notes: Set one year after the end of season two.
Beta’d by: [info]tovalentin, [info]therentgirls, and [info]gothphyle. Thank you kindly.
Length: 7125 words
Disclaimer: This is a transformative work of fiction inspired by the TV show Supernatural. Other than the character names and their particular hunter mythos, this puppy is all mine.
Summary: When you’re going to hell in a week, you don’t bother to hide your secrets.

Excerpt: They spent the last week of Dean’s life in Vegas.

Read the story on my website, here: http://www.duetpress.com/stormheller/to_live_and_die_in_las_vegas.htm. Kindly come back here to comment.


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[info]dine
2007-11-15 05:26 am UTC (link)
I'm not up on canon, and haven't read that much fic, but I really really liked this lots - Serena-the-maid was a fun OC, and the-demon-as-Serena was oddly likeable; obviously I wanted her to fail, but I ended up fond of her during their day in Vegas.

the twist was a good one - it caught me by surprise as much as the demon. excellently plotted!

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-15 05:57 pm UTC (link)
Thank you for the feedback; I'm so glad it worked for you.

I'm about to post the link to all the SPN communities; did you see anything that needs fixing? Is it hard to read on that background?

Thanks,
~ g.

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[info]calijirl5150
2007-11-16 12:13 am UTC (link)
I really like this premis on how Sam saves Dean. & the whole "spend the day w//a demon - very original..

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-16 01:35 am UTC (link)
I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you for commenting.
~ Stormy

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[info]agt_spooky
2007-11-16 02:47 am UTC (link)
Dude, this rocked!! I am SO happy to see you writing in SPN, and wincest no less! I'm so happy I assimilated you! You are now an official member of Special Hell. ;-)

I thought this was such a neat idea - give the demon a time line and then distract her from it, but damn, having Sam almost kill himself to do it totally freaked me out!

Excellent job! Can't wait to see what you come up with next!

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:32 am UTC (link)
Your job here is done. ;-)

Next? Let me recover from this one a bit first, eh?

Thanks again for the icon.
~ g.

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that was a pretty neat idea
[info]catdancerz
2007-11-16 03:54 am UTC (link)
very tricky...and it worked...huh...

wonder if the show writers need some hints :>

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Re: that was a pretty neat idea
[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:33 am UTC (link)
Tricky R Us. ;-) Glad it worked for you.
Thank you for commenting.
~ Stormy

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[info]lovetheguys
2007-11-16 02:19 pm UTC (link)
Loved how you got Dean out of the deal! Wonderful story, excellently written! Love, Robin

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:34 am UTC (link)
Thank you, Robin. Someone had to get Dean out the deal, might as well be me. ;-)

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[info]therentgirls
2007-11-16 04:00 pm UTC (link)
I'm so glad you posted. Great use of the OC and I adore the casual, that's-how-we-roll attitude the boys have about their relationship. It's a fun read and a good story.
~V~

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:35 am UTC (link)
Thanks again for the beta. It's great having my own personal medical reference person. 8-D

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[info]bonbonschnecke
2007-11-16 07:01 pm UTC (link)
This was absolutely fucking great.

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:36 am UTC (link)
Thank you so much for saying so!

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[info]mre_quecky
2007-11-16 10:11 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I loved this one^^ great idea of a distraction at the end.

I already thought they managed to manipulate the watch earlier, right after 11pm, but then Sam cut his arms and I thought oh no!!! And Dean went with her and THEN when I really thought it was over, you mention the time swap^^

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:37 am UTC (link)
Why have one plot twist when you can have 3? ;-)
Thanks for commenting
~ Stormy

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[info]amothea
2007-11-17 01:25 am UTC (link)
I enjoyed your story. :)

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 01:38 am UTC (link)
Thank you so much for reading it!

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[info]tovalentin
2007-11-17 02:47 am UTC (link)
Rockin' good opening sentence, dude! But I already told you that. Good voices, good twists, engaging plot, Wincest. (I wish I'd coined "Wincest", don't you?) Don't see how the writers can get Dean out of this any more gratifyingly than you did.

Hey, in my browser (Firefox) the para beginning "I don’t know about planned, exactly." appears in a different, serif font.

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[info]storm_grant
2007-11-17 01:41 pm UTC (link)
Thanks again for the beta. And for coming with me to Future Shop last night.

The font thing was weird. It just wasn't there, but I managed to fix it anyway. Go figure.

~ Stormy

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[info]icarusancalion
2007-11-17 08:04 pm UTC (link)
Oh, awesome. Great continuity with the cleaning lady turning up as the demoness. And, wow, those two are delightfully shameless in the Grand Canyon (I also loved how Dean called it making love) -- and everywhere else, too, especially with less than one week to live. A hunter gets it, cool.

Distracting the demon. That sad dead flower. The homeless guy and Sam trying to teach a demon about kindness. The last time they resurected someone didn't go so well. Oh. Yeah. Guess it didn't. :D

And Sam's suicide plus setting the clock back? A work of genius. Thank god Bobby came through with that little loophole.

You kept me on the edge of my seat all the way through. Great read.

Icarus

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-17 08:23 pm UTC (link)
I figured it would take more than one twisty plan to fool the demon. ;-)

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for reading. And for commenting.
~ Stormy

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[info]brigid_tanner
2007-11-19 02:09 am UTC (link)
Loved it! Of course Sam knew they'd wind up in Vegas...he knows Dean. Hope the maid's okay. Yeah! for Bobby coming up with something and Sam making sure it worked.

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-19 05:25 pm UTC (link)
I liked the idea that they all worked together to save Dean.

Of course the maid's going to be okay. She quits her job and becomes a karate instructor. ;-)

Thank you for taking the time to comment. I'm so glad you enjoyed my story.

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[info]zombean
2007-11-19 05:11 am UTC (link)
That was awesome, very unique twist!

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-19 05:26 pm UTC (link)
This fandom invites blood and violence, intertwined with the love. ;-)

Thank you for commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

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[info]sylvia_bond
2007-11-20 12:31 am UTC (link)
A very FUN and fast paced story that kept me interested right up to the very end. The brothers' love and relationship was true on as were the voices. I love watching them outwitting that demon and never saw it coming myself!!! More fanfic from you will be a welcome treat.

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-20 08:35 pm UTC (link)
I've written in other fandoms, but I'm trying to get the pro writing thing going so I'm attempting to focus on that. But the siren song of those loverly Supernatural boys is hard to resist. ;-)

Thank you for saying nice things about my story both here and in your own blog.
~ Stormy / Gina

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[info]sylvia_bond
2007-11-20 11:50 pm UTC (link)
No worries! I should be working on my pro novel as well, but I keep getting sucked right into fannish things, which is just as satisfying, and is louder in that I squee more reading fanfic than I do reading pretty much anything else!

I meant the things I wrote about your story. The blog is more for my own personal notes about a story. I got tired of reading things and the forgetting what I'd read that affected me so. I figure, part of what writing is is in absorbing what you read that is good. And then figuring out what effect it had on you, why that work, and then how it works.

Curious to know...how did you know that I'd commented about your story on my blog? I thought I was hidden away in my own little corner, nattering along.... : D

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[info]storm_grant
2007-11-21 05:28 pm UTC (link)
I'm not the only one who reads your blog for recs. Several people have found the story from your link. I check my web stats for "referring sites" and yours pops up. I follow the link backwards to see who's saying what about me. ;-)

I've been watching my web stats on this story and it's amazing how things change over time and across fandoms. More than 700 people have hit this story in the week or so it's been posted. 550 of them stayed less than 30 seconds, just bookmarking it and moving on. Relatively speaking, I've had very few comments, but since people are going back to their bookmarks, they're commenting slowly. I begin to think maybe the story sucked, so I follow the referring sites and people are posting about it in their own blogs, reccing it to their friends, etc., but not commenting (except you, of course). Weird. Back when I started fandom, you'd get emailed LoCs, then the lj thing happened and you get comments. Now... not so much of anything.

So, you and I met at VidCon, right? Or am I mistaken.
~ Stormy/Gina

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[info]sylvia_bond
2007-11-21 10:02 pm UTC (link)
I'm not the only one who reads your blog for recs. Several people have found the story from your link. I check my web stats for "referring sites" and yours pops up. I follow the link backwards to see who's saying what about me. ;-)


Okay, that makes sense. You're getting to my page from from the clicking path of people checking me out and going to you. So how are people finding me? Not that you know, but you know, I'm curious. There's one link from my LJ (no stat counter there), so maybe there coming from there. Anyway...it's interesting to me, those stats. And to you, it looks like!



I've been watching my web stats on this story and it's amazing how things change over time and across fandoms. More than 700 people have hit this story in the week or so it's been posted. 550 of them stayed less than 30 seconds, just bookmarking it and moving on. Relatively speaking, I've had very few comments, but since people are going back to their bookmarks, they're commenting slowly. I begin to think maybe the story sucked, so I follow the referring sites and people are posting about it in their own blogs, reccing it to their friends, etc., but not commenting (except you, of course). Weird. Back when I started fandom, you'd get emailed LoCs, then the lj thing happened and you get comments. Now... not so much of anything.


It might be a number of things, the decline in feedback. Because fandom is moving to being online, and it's all free if you can figure out where to get it, it's almost like, there's no obligation to close the loop with feedback. I used to think, wow, I only got one or two comments, and was sure that everyone else got hundred. When I check, it's the odd story here and there, or the BNF who gets tons of comments. Mostly people get one or two.




So, you and I met at VidCon, right? Or am I mistaken.


We met, I believe, at Escapade in 2007. We sat right next to each other at breakfast. We had a very serious and pleasant conversation about writing and editing, as I recall, and you were one of the first people I added to my friend's list on my LJ. It's taken me about, oh, about seven months to figure out how to use LJ to suit me, and I'm only now really working the system and reaching out to communicate. I totally didn't understand how to filter my "flist" and so up till about two weeks ago, I would go look at it and get overwhelmed at the bunches and bunches and bunches (and bunches) of posts from people. I've been relying on Amalthia's rec list for the most part, to point me in interesting directions within LJ. Otherwise, I'd not have any idea where to find good stories, good authors, etc. So anyway, how we met - it was all about the writing. I see by your LJ that you've made a good bit of progress towards your goal, unlike me, who manages to read more fanfic than is healthy for her. I tell myself it's research, but it's just damn fun, reading and then figuring out how the story works.

PS. Your story does NOT suck. : D

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[info]storm_grant
2007-11-22 09:56 pm UTC (link)
PS. Your story does NOT suck. :D
Thanks. 8-D But fandom has very high standards. Sometimes one fails to push fannish buttons. I truly believe pro fiction has lower standards.

We met, I believe, at Escapade in 2007
Right scenario, wrong con. Doh! Yes, I do recall. We had much fun. I love Escapade. Sadly, I don't think I'll be there again this year. I've got a bunch of cons lined up and haven't decided which ones to attend yet.

you've made a good bit of progress towards your goal, unlike me, who manages to read more fanfic than is healthy for her.
I spent the entire weekend reading Wincest. If I put 50 words on my novel, I'll be surprised. (I did restructure it a bit, though.) But then I spent today organizing all my agent info: researching, printing, putting it all in a binder, making a database of who will be best to submit to...

Good thing my boss is in Yellowknife, NWT. ;-)

Cheers,
~ g.

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[info]sylvia_bond
2007-11-28 06:00 pm UTC (link)
I truly believe pro fiction has lower standards.

That's an interesting point. I have had a few discussions about this with other people, whether or not fanfic is better and so on. One person had a good argument for the fact that pro fiction and fanfiction are hand in hand in quality. The difference is that in fanfiction you can specify pairing, level of intensity, everything, so it seems like you're getting more of what you want. If bookstores were organized like this, she said, you'd find exactly what you wanted and would be well satisfied. I can see her point, but I'm not sure I agree with her. Fanfiction standards might not be higher, but they are more exact and the feedback (both verbal and nonverbal) is immediate. If writer X writes a story and no one likes it because of the way she wrote it, the next time she writes one, she might try a different style, and voila, she hits everyone's buttons. So...is the difference the fact that fanfiction is more organic and therefore responds to the demands of its market?

On top of which, hell, I've never and I mean never read anything as intense as fanfiction.


We met, I believe, at Escapade in 2007
Right scenario, wrong con. Doh! Yes, I do recall. We had much fun. I love Escapade. Sadly, I don't think I'll be there again this year. I've got a bunch of cons lined up and haven't decided which ones to attend yet.


Which ones are in the running, then? I'm up for Escapade and Vividcon, if I can get in. There's nothing like a good fancon!


you've made a good bit of progress towards your goal, unlike me, who manages to read more fanfic than is healthy for her.

I spent the entire weekend reading Wincest. If I put 50 words on my novel, I'll be surprised. (I did restructure it a bit, though.) But then I spent today organizing all my agent info: researching, printing, putting it all in a binder, making a database of who will be best to submit to...


Oh my. Oh my, yes, I know that scenario well. I'm working my way through Amalthia's rec list. All the stories she picks hit my buttons. So, yeah, pro novel? Uh..........yeah, about that story where Sammy.....sheesh. I've been trying to read each one like a sensible person (and think about it and write it up), but I end up gobbling them down like I'm starving.


Good thing my boss is in Yellowknife, NWT. ;-)


Wish I had a boss in yellowknife! Hell, wish I had a boss! (Something about having a boss steadies one. Lost job. Looking. Prospects good.)

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[info]joyofreading
2007-11-21 06:30 am UTC (link)
That was a very interesting way to get Dean out of his Deal. I like that they did something oh so simple and the demon was too full of herself to notice.

Loved the interaction between the boys too.

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-21 05:30 pm UTC (link)
Yay! Glad you liked it. I wanted the gang to get Dean out of the deal, not just Sam or Bobby. It was partly Dean's idea, too.

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[info]liveinadream87
2007-11-21 09:42 am UTC (link)
That was incredible. Loved Serena, and how they set the clocks forward? Very clever.

Awesome story

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-21 05:32 pm UTC (link)
I liked making both Serena the maid and Serena the Crossroads Demon likeable but not perfect characters. It was a good writing exercise for me. So glad it worked for you!

Thank you so much for commenting.

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[info]ceares
2007-11-27 09:31 am UTC (link)
Oh, I loved this. Loved their attitude and their desperation in the last hours. I like what you did with Serena, and most especially,I loved the Persephone reference.

Welcome to the fandom by the way.

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[info]stormheller
2007-11-27 06:39 pm UTC (link)
Thank you kindly, for the words of welcome and the nice comments about the story. I'm glad the desparation came across despite their sort of sunny, partyin' attitudes. I've been watching a lot of Dexter lately and I love the contrast of all that Miami fun 'n sun with the dark and deadly stuff. Glad to see it worked.

Thanks for commenting.
~ Stormy

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[info]kandkl
2007-12-30 07:18 pm UTC (link)
Sam let his hand drift low on Dean’s ass. “Yeah. We are. But Dean here’s got two more days before a demon comes for him, and I’m, you know, the anti-Christ or something, so relatively speaking, we’re okay with this.”

SO MUCH LOVE for this story. Extremely well thought out and beautifully written. Sam cutting his wrists actually took my breath away. Thanks so much for sharing.

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Thanks!
[info]storm_grant
2007-12-30 08:19 pm UTC (link)
Well, you just made my day! 8-)

Thank you so much for taking the time to comment. I'm so glad the story worked for you.

Happy New Year!

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[info]jensenrick
2008-01-23 05:39 pm UTC (link)
Loved it, Stormy! The demon voice was very true, trying to twist the knife by saying Sam will be relieved when he's gone- and Dean doesn't even flinch. And the 'suicide' attempt, what a great trick- especially paralleling how Dean had given up his life to save Sam. I loved the Anti-Christ references too, and how Sam hated seeing Dean fuck her, but would join in the threeway. Good stuff.

Didn't take me long to join Special Hell, huh?

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[info]storm_grant
2008-01-23 05:50 pm UTC (link)
Bwahahahahahahahahahhahahahahahahhahahahahahahhahahahah!!!!

Welcome to hell. ;-)

Now go read everything by fleshflutter and thehighwaywoman.

Hey, they even write some gen.

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